Like sinking your teeth into a cloud in the sky. It tastes like something your mom made. Better than finding a pot of gold at the end of the rainbow. The creamy frosting along wit the gooey inside and rock hard outside. When I take a bite out of it my brain stops and paralyzes my body. The rainbow sprinkles jumping everywhere on the surface of the cupcake makes me want it even more. Especially the strawberry ones, they call out my name. The sweet sent makes my heart pound faster. The colors make my mouth water. As I get closer to it, it seems like it's running away from me, making temptation even stronger. As I bite into it my eyes roll to the back of my head, the warm strawberry sensation gets the best of me. I reach for more and more and more. Although I start feeling full after the twenty second one, I keep stuffing my face anyway. When I get to the last one, I knew there was no more room for another one, but I don't care. Putting that last one into my mouth was like trying to get a two thousand pound woman into a size to pair of jeans, impossible.
2 comments:
You could slow down a litte when you are typing your blog. I liked the part where you said you were full but kept eating regardless. This helped to improve the sensation of how heavenly the cupcake is. Saying that it is a tempation helps the imagery a lot. The fact that you succumbed to the temptation also makes me want to have one of those cupcakes. I think you should have had a picture to enhance the description. Try to use all of the sensory details. Overall, nice job.
You could slow down a litte when you are typing your blog. I liked the part where you said you were full but kept eating regardless. This helped to improve the sensation of how heavenly the cupcake is. Saying that it is a tempation helps the imagery a lot. The fact that you succumbed to the temptation also makes me want to have one of those cupcakes. I think you should have had a picture to enhance the description. Try to use all of the sensory details. Overall, nice job.
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